Thursday, September 3, 2015

Mini Essay Outline
By Madeleine Seltzer

Topic: Book review of The Language of Flowers

Ideas:
  • Informative about the meanings of flowers
  • A strong and sentimental tale of growing up without a mother
  • A story regarding a struggle but finding the beauty in small aspects of life
Evidence:
  • Main character studies and is interested in the Victorian language of flowers
  • She is a foster child growing up and has to learn how to be a mother
  • Her life is so difficult and sad yet she finds something to keep her OK


Thesis: This book is an example of a struggling girl who is starving for love and has to learn how to give it away.


Preston Allen Thesis Statement

Art in school: topic of choosing

Thesis statement: I feel that educational music classes should be included in the public schooling system and is beneficial for the students education.


  1. Kids stay engaged in school.
  2. The students will have more success in society.
  3. It also gives the students better self-confidence.  
         



        

Blog Reviews And Ratings



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Blog Ratings 

Madeleine Seltzer followed Lofimusicblog.com and found that it was consistent with their posting and frequent. It was visually pleasing and inclusive but it could have used more text, image relevance and reviews instead of only audio posts. The rating it received was a 8. 

Connor Allen followed Hemmings.com and found that it was consistent and frequent. It was especially visually pleasing if you were a car enthusiast. The rating it received was a 6. 

Preston Allen followed Classicrockblog.com and thought the blog was consistent considered nothing ever changed. It feels like there is a sense of abandonment to the site. The rating it received was a 7. 

Blog Review
http://undergroundnewyorkpubliclibrary.com

        Dustin Saunders followed the blog Undergroundnewyorkpubliclibrary.com and came to the conclusion that a blog does not necessarily need to include tons of text to still be appeasing. Interesting images suffice just as well. The audience that this blog is targeting is anyone interested in literature but it also expands to anyone interested in photography as well as urban environments. 
        This blog is not only visually stimulating but it is also informative. The author simply takes a photo of a stranger reading on the New York subway and then lists resources regarding the book. It includes a place to rent or buy and a brief preview of the novel. 
        Although the ratio of text to images is slim, the pictures convey an emotion to the reader that makes them return to the site. Usually it would be difficult to keep a stable audience but it is done so well in this blog and it inspires you to read and return. 





"Arts in the schools"

Thesis statement: Music is essential and benificial in the school enviroment.

1. Attending concerts and partricipating in group activities.

2. Surrounding yourself in group oriantations and activities. Learning to work as a whole.

3. Learing to grow with other students through learning music and balance between classwork.

Picture from: register.wciconferences.org

Tuesday, September 1, 2015

What Your E-mail Etiquette Says About You


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Thesis:  “But even the most garbled and indecipherable of them are saying something, and what they have to say is, in terms of social status, a bummer. See, the e-blurt, like so many modes of personal expression, is all about power.”

The thesis states that the emailer or texter is too busy to spell out what he or she is trying to convey, so they have given you the job to decode it.  They do this because they are more busy or powerful then you and don’t have time to waste.

First Supporting Argument:  “To shoot a messy spitball through the cybernetic air is to convey a very simple and subconscious message to it recipient: I am busier than you, hence I am more powerful than you.”

The first supporting argument states that the sender feels as though they have already mastered the correct etiquette. In that case they don’t feel the need to practice it on a lower status’.


Second Supporting Argument:  “But these days it is often the highly wired overlords, and those who aspire to march among them, who choose to express themselves in the brute vernacular of 12-year-old- mall rats. “One, it says that you’re sort of ‘hip’ powerful. You’re not formal and stuffy. And done right, it can also remind people of your power. In other words, you’re so confident of your position in life that what might be considered errors for others are not errors for you.”

The second supporting argument states that it is also done to stay current and connect to the times and connect to a younger audience.  As well as to not appear stuffy and stale.

Third Supporting Argument:  “Still, the catch is that that CEO might be planting the seeds of his own sabotage. As Flynn explains, “If your poorly written e-mail messages are retained as part of the company’s electronic business records, and the company is hit with a lawsuit, and your e-mail is subpoenaed, the fact that your messages were written in an unprofessional illogical way could come back to haunt not only you but the company as well. Because that may help support a plaintiff’s claim that it wasn’t a professional work environment.”

The third supporting argument doesn’t support the flow of the thesis, but it does back up the fact that there can be consequences to inadequate use of grammar and communicating.

Conclusion:  “Which only confirms what I’ve always felt about power: that the people who really understand it don’t say anything at all.”

The conclusion states the underlying feelings that the author truly has about the subject.


Connor Allen, Preston Allen, Madeleine Seltzer, Dustin Saunders
Chapter Three: Arrangement
By Madeleine Seltzer

         Chapter three is a nice introduction about the structure and pattern a successful essay should include. My personal reaction was pleased because I feel like I understand the flow of the arrangement that the book presented. As students, we are assigned many different writing assignments, many of them essays. It is clear in this chapter what is expected of us. I enjoyed that an essay could be done by a formula but the book also let the writer have room to be an individual with a different style. I also learned that it is acceptable to begin the introduction with a question or quotation as long as it prompts some kind of interest.
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Arrangements

Chapter Three: Arrangement


            Arranging an essay correctly not only improves the quality of the essay, but can also help the audience connect to your topic.  Chapter three explores the basic structure and various ways to arrange an essay.
            The classic concept of an introduction, a body, and a conclusion I was familiar with.  I was however surprised by the level of detail and the various approaches provided for each of these elements.  The chapter presented many different strategies for each of the three different components of an essay.  I found this to be refreshing.  Writing is a subjective endeavor and each of us tends to think about and approach our writing in different ways.  I felt as though this chapter was under standing of the fact that everyone has a unique approach to their writing. 
            Despite the many different avenues you can take for a essay there are specific ways to structure your essay.  I appreciated the section focused on starting with a formal outline.  I have found for myself that beginning with a formal outline helps me to clarify my thoughts before beginning the essay.  From this outline it is an easier task for me to formulate my introduction and begin to build the body of my essay.  I found the examples of many different ways to structure your introduction very helpful.  This section of the chapter is one that I will revisit in the future.  The outlined pattern of development for the body of the essay was very useful.  It helped reinforce the proper pattern of development, as well as the need for a clear coherent arrangement of examples that help reinforce your thesis statement.
            I found chapter three to be helpful and informative.  It was a mixture between concepts that were refreshed in my mind and new concepts to consider while writing an essay. This chapter will serve as a good resource for me in the future of this class, as well as many others.


Dustin Saunders