Rubric Criterion

 

Topic development:

 I feel that after writing my essay that I would receive an A in this category.  My ideas that I choose are fully explored with detail, depth and complexity.  I really go into depth and try to explain the best I can with my ideas.  This is for my research essay and it meets page requirements. 

 

Style: 

This is something that I have always had a problem with.  I have a tendency to write very casually.  It has been this way ever since the sixth grade.  I have problems with several areas so I would give myself a C.  I wish I was able to write more scholarly and less like I’m talking to the reader. 

 

Works Cited page/ MLA manuscript format: 

This is something that I feel very confident on.  I have never been able to really do a good job on works cited pages but this time I would give myself an A.  I really have minor flaws if any on it.  I used very good sources in this essay.  I used the citations that were given to me and so I feel confident that they will work correctly.

-Preston Allen

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Rubric Criterion

 

 

Thesis statement: I found that looking through my research essay that my thesis is fairly strong. I would rate my thesis is a strong B. The thesis is clear and understandable. My thesis is clear and specific about hunting and the economy. The thesis is upfront in the essay and drives the essay in all other points argued.

Topic development: My ideas addressed in the essay are understandable. These ideas are general and specific but I could make them more clear and fit them better in my essay. I think that they average a C grade. There definitely addressed but are mere and not as support full as they can be. They can have more detail and thought process involved in the essay. They tie together my main points but I feel that they could better be explained in my essay.

Clarity/Coherence: In honest perspective I believe that I have averaged about a D in this field. My ideas are fairly on topic but ramble and are not as specific as I would like. My ideas ramble sometimes in my essay and not always gather together my thoughts which can confuse the reader. I would like to go through my essay and read my run on sentences and shorten maybe even take out unwanted ideas. I need to keep my idea specific to my points but also make sure that they tie back to my thesis statement.

Research Essay Blog

 

 

 

 

Improvements made to my essay by myself:

1.      I worked on the punctuation problem in my essay.  I used commas way too often and need to slow down my writing in other ways. 

2.      I worked on a ton of grammar problems.  I found a ton in the essay.  There were just words that did not make sense with my writing.  This has hopefully been permanently fixed in the essay. 

3.      I worked on writing less casually.  I have always written like this and it is just a hard thing for me to correct, but hopefully it will sound much less casual. 

 

Improvements made to my essay by peer reviewed essay:

1.      Connor told me to first work on my small details to support my freaking point. 

2.      He told me to use more scientific evidence to add to me debate.

3.      He told me to work on my casual writing style which was funny due to the fact that that was one of the things I choose to work on from the beginning. 

-Preston Allen

 

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Improving N-S-R Draft

Improving my not so rough draft.
Connor Allen

1. I found that in my first draft that I didnt have enough sources. With more saearching I compiled more details.
2. I Worked on cuting out my long run on sentences. These are common in my writing i still need to revise and edit them and tie my ideas to my FP but its getting closer.
3. I tried to find data that helped support my theseis stronger and more relavant to theinformation that I was presenting. My data needs to be useful to my topic and stay consistant.

 PRESTON ANSWERES
1. Preston stated that i used more evidence to support my essay. Before my essay was strong in personal narrative.
2. Preston then found that I made a fourth topic chioce and included data in tat topic about hunting.
3. Preston stated that I
added more ethical data and it helped move my essay foward.

Chapter 17 Reading Response

 

Reading Response

Chapter 17

            For chapter 17, I learned about integrating sources and avoiding plagiarism. Now to me, I see a common theme throughout this whole last two chapters in it’s about using MLA format. For some reason I hate MLA format. I think the world be a better place if bibliographies didn’t exist. I find giving credit to the authors is an important aspect of writing but I’m just lazy and hate writing MLA works cited pages. I learned about paraphrasing which is something that I do quite often since I can never figure out what to write besides what the author writes. I seem to have the same problem where when I read the author’s writing I simply want to copy and paste what he or she may have said. So paraphrasing and learning how to use it is something that I will use for the rest of my life. I also learned about summarizing which is a little different than paraphrasing but it’s somewhat the same as well. Summarizing involves a brief restatement in my own words in a passage for the main idea. I also learned about quoting, and when you quote you need to use the writer’s exact words as they appear in the source including all punctuation, capitalization, and spelling. And the quote has to be enclosed by quotation marks. I learned what synthesizing was. When I write a synthesis was supposed to combine paraphrases, summaries, and quotations with my own ideas. That was something I did not know before. I also learned how to avoid plagiarism which is something that I’ve never had to actually deal with that now I know just a little bit more on how to avoid it. Overall this chapter was a good read and I did learn a lot but I am tired of writing MLA works cited pages.

            Now being a student in college I have to give a educated response on how this chapter affects my student life. Academically this was a good chapter to read because it did teach me a lot I really hadn’t known before and also refresh my memory on quite a few things. This chapter in this book is very handy for a person who wants to be able to write a solid good works cited page and learn how to avoid plagiarism. I believe that summarizing and paraphrasing things from the author is something that is a necessity for the student to achieve. It helps the student look simply smarter in than they actually could be. I think that high school students should be using this book and taught early on how to stay away from plagiarism because it is a serious problem that society faces today. A fun story I have is when I was a junior in high school, my principal who is no longer the principle of meet high school was accused of plagiarizing a graduation speech. It was true that he actually plagiarize the speech and spoke the exact same words the original speaker at spoke. I think it’s funny that he was the one to do this due to the fact that he was a doctor. Plagiarizing is something that is a big problem in our culture and this book helps a lot by explaining what plagiarizing is and how you can avoid it.

-Preston Allen

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Chapter 17 Reading Response

Chapter 17 describes the uses of avoiding plagiarism with integrating sources into your essay. chapter 17 is useful because it gives examples on how to work through problems that may occur or showing and guiding you through scenarios that you may encounter. it goes over summarizing and quoting sources and synthesizing sources as well.it goes over common mistake areas of plagiarism. as a student I would like to see more examples of work cited pages. Overall this is a useful tool for helping with plagiarism
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Ethos, Pathos, and Logos

Ethos, Pathos Logos

 

Ethos: This is the ethical part of argumentation.  It is the credibility if the author and or speaker.  It is often conveyed by differing the views. 

SB 1:  Listening to vinyl records is a better way to listen to any form of musical media, due to the fact that collectors listen to them. 

SB 2:  I have listened to records all my life and that is the way I prefer to listen to music. 

SB 3: I collect records and know the value of them. 

 

Pathos: This is the emotional part of argumentation.  It is a way to persuade the reader or audience by affecting their emotions.  It’s a complete emotional appeal. 

SB 1: Listing to records in the olden days was a form of social gatherings. 

SB 2: Listening to records is a much more intimate way to listen to music because of how the person listening to them has to be so much more involved. 

SB 3: It can send you to a different time, and help create a new outlook on listening to music.     

 

Logos: This is the part of reasoning in an argument.  This is where logic comes into play with persuading.  It’s the logical things to understand. 

SB 1: Records have more value than any other form of media.

SB 2: Records and record players come in all shapes and sizes.

SB 3: Records are warmer sounding due to the friction that the needle makes with the record while it is spinning. 

 

-Preston Allen

 

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Ethos Pathos Logos Connor Allen

Ethos:
The credability of a speaker or writer. " as a hunhter I understand the amount of time and effort it takes to track animals".

SB1. Hunting and the time it takes to prepare for hunting.

SB2. How as a hunter you knmow what type of caliber to use for the gmae choice.

SB3. As a hunter you know how much money you pay for licenses

Pathos:
The use of emotion.  "If ou do not gather the game, your family will stuggle through the winter and possibly die".

SB1. No killed game willl lead to starvation.

SB2. killing game brings clothing if need be.

SB3 killing game brings revune to local meat shops.

Logos:
Thoughtful explanation of the subject. " Your scope succefully makes three piont impact on all five of your targets inside the bullseye".

SB1. Hunting brings in income to many low come states.

SB2. Hunting helps preserve wildlife refugees.

SB3. Huntig helps controll migration and animal population.

Chapter 16 Reading Response

Chapter 16
 Chapter 16 is about finding and evaluating sources. Chapter 16 honestly really helps students understand what to look for in sources. It is added information that is needed to help determine accurate sources.

For a student I would go more in depth for understating how to locate information on the internet. Maybe adding sources or other valuable websites would help build credible sources. Using keywords helps a lot with sorting out information.